W.A.L.T. write two descriptive paragraph about what we can see in the picture below and we need to show not tell. I like doing this because when the reader read the words they can imagine what happening in the story. Maybe next time I could work on by adding more descriptive words.
In the woods of the middle of the night, the sound of the lightning thunder was shrieking. As the man was running like the peregrine falcon, to escape from the hunter. The branches and the trees was deafening to plummet. His heart was thumping and he was frightened. He was freezing because of the bitter howl of the wind.
As he hid in a cabin, he started to fell asleep. He woke up, and the sound of the rats was creepy and scary. He was exhausted and dirty. He sat down on the cold, dusty floor to think how can he go back on his home and find his family. After all he can’t go back anymore because all of the sudden he was trap and stuck on the mystery woods.
Kia ora Faith
ReplyDeleteI think that this narrative was beautiful with very descriptive words like 'The branches and the trees was deafening to plummet'.I think that next time you could check the spelling but other that that I think that this was extremely amazing.
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Julia
Yaldhurst Model School
Hi my name is Mia from Yaldhurst Model School, I really like your story. It may be short but it gets into the main point straight away. I think you should read through it again because I think there was a couple mistakes.
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