W.A.L.T... write a persuasive text. What I enjoyed is researching some facts to back up my opinion. What I found hard is writing the boy of the paragraph. Maybe next time I could make my persuasive writing more longer and add some complex sentence into it.
Should cellphones be banned?
In my opinion, I strongly believe that phones should be banned in school. In fact, we don’t really use or need them. So, what’s the point of having them in school? When we can use them at home, when we have our free time.
Firstly, cellphones is originally against school rules. Some people usually sneak them around, when the teachers aren’t there. Also, they can actually do something that leads them into problems. Like, cyberbullying, inappropriate content and more. Teachers usually waste their time dealing with this behaviours around phones. It causes them to not have that time to teach us students.
Secondly. whenever people played with their phone, it gets other people’s attentions. It can lead others to not learn anything because of this distraction. They can use it to cheat on their test, which is not right. It can also lead into fights. Like, competing who has the best phone, who has the expensive one or the cheaper one.
Thirdly, school support us with chromebook for our learning. We don’t need our phone to use it with. In fact, other school in different countries doesn’t use technology and don’t have wifi. But, they allowed phones in their school. Some people use it to call and text each other. And they will become more likely unsociable. Besides, what’s the phone for then?
For these reasons, I believed that phones should be banned in School. For me, its your own responsibility to chose to learn or not. Re-think if we have to ban it or not?
Should cellphones be banned?
In my opinion, I strongly believe that phones should be banned in school. In fact, we don’t really use or need them. So, what’s the point of having them in school? When we can use them at home, when we have our free time.
Firstly, cellphones is originally against school rules. Some people usually sneak them around, when the teachers aren’t there. Also, they can actually do something that leads them into problems. Like, cyberbullying, inappropriate content and more. Teachers usually waste their time dealing with this behaviours around phones. It causes them to not have that time to teach us students.
Secondly. whenever people played with their phone, it gets other people’s attentions. It can lead others to not learn anything because of this distraction. They can use it to cheat on their test, which is not right. It can also lead into fights. Like, competing who has the best phone, who has the expensive one or the cheaper one.
Thirdly, school support us with chromebook for our learning. We don’t need our phone to use it with. In fact, other school in different countries doesn’t use technology and don’t have wifi. But, they allowed phones in their school. Some people use it to call and text each other. And they will become more likely unsociable. Besides, what’s the phone for then?
For these reasons, I believed that phones should be banned in School. For me, its your own responsibility to chose to learn or not. Re-think if we have to ban it or not?
Great work Faith, you have worked very hard to complete this persuasive text. You have structured your text correctly with a fantastic opening statement. Maybe next time you could add some facts that you have researched to help persuade your audience. Keep up the great work.
ReplyDeleteHi Ms Wilton,
DeleteThanks for the feedback, I really appreciate it. Next time I'll make sure that I can add some facts on my writing, so I can improved in it. Have a good day!
Hi Faith,
ReplyDeleteYou've done really really good, I like the way how you contract a sentence using persuasive writing, you also have structured your text correctly. You have bright ideas faith...Maybe next time you could put more information's on it. Keep up the good work! Well done Faith.